學生寒假作文點評(1)

My good friend Iwant to tell you about Liu Huan.She is both my friend and my classmate.She was born in otc.1995.She live in PengShui now.She has around face and big,black eyes.Her nose is short Ilike her black,short,and bright hair.They make her look really pretty and clever.She is silm,short and neat.As good friend,we often play,eat together.She often give me afew words of comfort when Icry.I hope we are best friend forever.點評

開頭不錯，但Oct.應該大寫；live---lives,As good friends(復數)；give---gives,friends總之，如果注意到了動詞的數的變化和名詞的數的變化，應該是一篇好的作文。

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